Two-sided conversation Part 2

Lindsay Slater writes:
Mr. Duncan,
Thanks! It does make sense, but it's dense, and I'll have to read through it more than once. I particularly appreciate your warning that Marlow's loyalty and kinship to Kurtz are limited by Kurtz' true nature. He hopes for the ultimate ideal, but doesn't find it. I'll be in contact about structure as I flesh the paper out.
If the second message I sent you was the starting of a thesis, would this be better?
Original: Conrad exposes the desire to discover a validity about the humanitarian façade in the 19^th century through Marlow’s loyalty to Kurtz.
2.0: Conrad exposes Marlow's desire to discover virtue in the humanitarian facade of colonialism through his search and loyalty to Kurtz.
Thank you for taking time on your break to respond. I've been chewing on this essay assignment for a while, and have only just broken through. I suggest that all students from our class talk to students from Hardin's classes because they analyzed Heart of Darkness differently.
Lindsay
PS Go ahead and post what you like on the blog. I'm interested to see what learning opportunity you see in this conversation.

Dear Lindsay,
Take your idea further: Despite his protestations, Marlow's experience with both kinds of devils—the Kurtz kind and the Manager kind—demolishes his faith in the humanitarian façade that only screens the true nature of the European "squeeze" of Africa.
The main thing is to make a definitive statement. Kurtz, who makes the most noise about the noble mission of the white European in Africa, becomes more gangster than virtuous savior when he's put to the test. With complete freedom to do as he pleases, he abandons his principles and sets himself up as a demigod who debases his "subjects."
Anyway, chew on that a little.
JD